Our final cut of our test opening sequence was edited over a period of 3 days - our editing schedule is below. This schedule worked well and we are likely to use it again for the main edit.
We got some feedback on our rough cut:
One technician told us that firstly, our sound levels could be improved, with smoother transitions between loud and quiet audio and to make the radio announcement louder. Also in terms of audio, she suggested that we get rid of the ambient sound for the sequence of shots in the kitchen - which she thought could be improved by showing the lawyer character turning on the radio, emphasising it's importance. Finally, she suggested a change which we have agreed as a group to definitely implement, which involves changing the position of the jogger so that he is jogging towards the lawyer from behind her, so that we can more clearly show the distance between the two and also shoot from behind the lawyer, making the shot seem more creepy and better communicating the 'false-stalker' situation by putting the audience in the position of a stalker.
We also got feedback from our teacher, who suggested that the sequence as a whole should be faster-paced and it should be clearer that the main character is a lawyer. She suggested that we could do this by giving the character a more formal costume, such as a lanyard and a longer skirt, as well as a less revealing dress. This also applies to her props, as it was suggested that she is given a briefcase or a working handbag and keys for when she locks her door. It was additionally suggested that we make certain shots more clear, such as focusing for a longer time on the envelope containing the official documents, or at least make them more clearly significant by making the lawyer put them into her bag - also, she suggested that we include notes and pictures on the stalker as part of these documents in order to make it clearer that she knows the person who is being discussed in the radio broadcast. Similarly to the technician she also suggested that we include a shot of the lawyer turning on the radio as she enters the kitchen.
Having more character action within the longer shots during the start of the sequence was also suggested, as was making the initial stalker POV shot longer due to it's jarring nature meaning that the audience needs more time to adjust to what is going on. With regards to the content of the radio announcement it was suggested that a 'Breaking News' audio clip could be played before the news about the stalker is revealed, and that the lawyer could visibly react to this news. Also, it once again said that the jogger sequence was unclear and must be clearer, and that the final shot could be improved if the lawyer looked over her shoulder at the end (Which was initially part of our plan but was forgotten about on the test shoot day).
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